Thursday, 3 September 2015

WALT - I can use precise words and phrases to enhance my writing.

Why do kids have to wear school uniform?!

Why should kids wear a school uniform when no one else does? I assure you, all kids want to look unique, but they don't have the chance! Don't get me started on how Oakland's schools uniform is red and green, I mean it's not christmas anymore, and even if it was, why would we want to come to school on christmas! Also, have you ever been to the shop and you're to tiny to fit any of the senior tops! How embarrassing would it be if you came to school with a top seven size's to enormous for you!

My next step is to seek feedback from other students, to help improve my writing.

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